Friday, August 24, 2018

My Writing , DAD COME BACK

I am proud of this piece of writing because it took a long time to make and I'm proud of how it turned out and the heartfelt Writing . I learnt how to make a very descriptive and emotional piece of writing .  My next step with this piece of writing is to focus on describing it but not to much and make very emotional pieces .

2 comments:

  1. This is a really good emotional story!

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  2. Nice job on creating this really emotional piece of writing

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